Thesis: The school year is too long, and should be shortened to benefit students and techers, save districts money, and improve test scores and acedemic results. Other countries have shorter school years and achieve better results.

Topic sentence: a shorter school year would benefit students and teachers by giving them more time off.

Detail 1: Students and teachers would be able to spend more time with their families.

Detail 2: Teachers would be refreshed and rejuvenated and able to teach more effectively.

Topic sentence: A shorter school year would save school districts millions of dollars per year.

Detail 1: Districts could save money on energy cost by keeping schools closed longer.

Detail 2: A shorter school year means much lower supply and transport costs.

Detail 3: Well-rested and happy students would help improve test scores.

Shortening the school year would be a great way to improve the quality of life for students, teachers, and parents while saving money for districts and improving acedemic results.